I have no interest in continuing after the first few minutes. Slow, clumsy dialogue (with an AI voice, no less) and you explain nothing. Why add subway surfers? You've already got an "avatar" character you could draw in different poses and "animate" to act like talking. That would be far more engaging than this.

Dialogue is soo slow.. there's like.. 2 minutes of actual content there.. and what's with the subway surfers intermission? x3 it's not even centered to the middle of the screen either

The video pace feels way too slow and doesnt make the progress interesting to watch. I would reccomend you to watch this as a good reference for the pace you should aim to achieve at your videos. The AI voice cannot compare to how you can retale what you did about the project. Think of it like you're presenting your work to your friends.

On the visual part, avoid showing the developer UI and show what you have done from the perspective of a player wanting to try the game. I've used the video in question becuase, it mostly has footage from the game itself and a viewer with no experience in development at all can tell what work has been done outright. You're not doing a development tutorial after all.

If you're trying to get more onto your thought process behind the development, show your thought process visually, not the development UI itself. For reference, i think this video executes this idea very well.

Video feels low effort and that slow AI voice is not something that you would use in a devlog.

edit: oh and btw would you consider using Godot instead of Unity? It's a FOSS competitor.

This guy is throwing this on every gaming community. If this doesn't get pulled imma do the same thing /s